Review and edit site's copy as a whole

[bepetersn]

Do this with a goal towards making our content understandable to the intended audience (open government people, journalists, developers, and intersection thereof), and also towards cohesiveness and consistency between pages.

For example of several things that need to be clarified and improved, more on some pages than others:

• Consistent references (by name) to the agencies that are collecting a given dataset.
• Also, overzealous references to what happens before and after a given stage, to give it more context (and again, with reference to the agency by name). For instance, talk about the fact that the OEMC / Dispatch Operations call in the Police Department, another agency.
• A discussion of what a given dataset represents, what it might look like if we had it. At what point does it get collected? And what do we KNOW about what's happened thus far if this data exists? In general, the 7 "W" questions should be asked. For example:
  • Crime Incident data is actually the data that is entered into the CPD's database as a result of a report written by an officer, after some event has happened.
  • It is collected as a matter of procedure by the CPD. Most crime incidents are initiated by calls for service, though some smaller percentage, police discover or initiate.
  • We therefore know that either police initiated this event, or that it was called in by at least one person. Many crime incidents do not result in arrests.

[bepetersn]

@GovInTrenches has offered to do this.

[bepetersn]

@GovInTrenches, is there more to be done still on this front?

[GovInTrenches]

I’m slowly moving towards this. My goal is to wrap this up today. 
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Christopher Whitaker
Brigade Captain, City of Chicago
@CivicWhitaker

On March 30, 2014 at 4:41:20 PM, Brian Everett Peterson (notifications@github.com) wrote:

@GovInTrenches, is there more to be done still on this front?

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